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Vision (4) The film follows the restoration of a clown costume. That's a nice, simple idea and simple can be good. But after watching and thinking about this film I realized what I wanted to see was 1) a close look at how bad those rat and moth holes are you mention in the description and 2) the step-by-step instructions on how each was fixed. The film clearly presents an idea, meriting 4 stars, but as you'll see in the other scores doesn't live up to it.

Originality (2) I would call this film an instructional sewing video without the instructions. I can see by the ending that the costume has been restored but I don't know what went into that restoration other than cutting and sewing. I haven't learned anything other than how to put the costume on. With the most basic instructions I would say 3 stars, but without them I have to say 2.

Technique (3) There's a few bits of “editing magic” here – one with slow-motion and one where the costume seems to jump of its own volition into the restorer's hands, by playing the video backwards. I'm guessing most video editing software these days will do those tricks at the click of a button? Otherwise it's all basic near-the-shoulder shots watching them work. Nothing bad, nothing fancy, so 3 stars.

Impact (2) As far as I know these are very basic sewing techniques and very basic sewing work. Is satin difficult to work with? Was the costume in really bad shape? I don't know. I get to see the finished costume but there wasn't enough shots revealing the time-worn beginning to see what changed. The music sounds like something epic is happening and would give some other already-epic film a little boost of impact, but for this film feels undeserved and almost pretentious. That's the danger of choosing epic music for mundane activities. The ending does feel like a culmination of work so I'll say 2 stars instead of 1.
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Ian Chisholm
Artist | Hobbyist | Literature
United States
Favorite Quote: “Take chances, make mistakes, get messy!”

I'm here to tell my stories. I love Anime and I'm aiming at a career writing the scripts for original animation, but for now I'm a writer-in-training creating worlds and characters and telling stories with them for my amusement. I'm always searching for people to collaborate with, especially visual artists; if you read something here that inspires you, I would be interested in enlisting you for a creative partnership with the goal of making something awesome. And I'm here to learn and help others learn. I want advice on how I can improve, I take on prompts and requests to sharpen my writing skills, and if you'd like a critique or some proofreading you only have to ask.

My 2017 avatar is me down by the lake! Guiding the boat of Dreams toward the shore of Careers ... or something poetical. That was my favorite coat back then, plus my cool broad-brim hat.


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Nihatemoon Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2016
and thanks for the llama badge
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l-lappy Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the fav x
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